With every single leaf That fell down From the Tree In the Autumn, A Bird moved One step closer To Homelessness.
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With every single leaf That fell down From the Tree In the Autumn, A Bird moved One step closer To Homelessness.
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I like it. In your last line, “to the homelessness” the “the” is redundant. The line would normally read simply, “to homelessness” Always interesting when a human anthropomorphize’s non-human life. The bird of course, and unlike humans, wears its home, basically. Under normal natural conditions where man does not create chaos and destruction, animals, birds, insects, are never homeless as such. The environment is their home, something we’ve lost, and which incidentally your sharp and short poem brings to light, whether you meant to or not.
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Hi Sha’Tara! Appreciate your thoughts on my short poem. I have tried picturing a Human through the Bird, A particular phase through Autumn and the departure/demise of a person as loss of leaf from the tree.
When you’re around a person to whom you think you belonged, they appeared to be a home for your soul and then one day they do leave us. They depart (willingly or unwillingly).
You feel homeless, not like forever but for a period of time, at least.
Thanks for that ‘the’ part. It’s rectified now. 😊😊
Love,
Anushka.
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Sad because it’s not just the birds. Beautiful.
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True that. But the beautiful part is that homelessness is temporary. Thank you dear.😊😊
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Somehow I’m unable to see your posts. I thought if telling you this many times, though forgot to tell you each time. I’m not sure what’s wrong but I so wish I could read you. 😑😐
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Its not just birds that would get effected .. We will experience the heat of it too of this continues ..
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True that. Thank you for reading. 😊😊
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beautifully written…lovely lines
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Thank You dear. 😊
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So beautifully worded and so true simply touched Me. The bird returned homelessness and that is where if has to really go and that is where we need to.👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
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Thank You Again. You’re a morale booster. 😊
– Anushka.
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Hi I have nominated you for the Mystery Blogger Award 2016. Feel free to accept or reject this nomination. .The nomination post is in the link below.
https://idoetchings.wordpress.com/2016/11/06/mystery-blogger-award/?preview=t
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Thanks for the nomination. I would try my best to participate. 😊
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Such a thoughtful message in such a succinct poem! Well done! 🙂
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Thank You. Appreciate your kind words.😊
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You’re so welcome. 🙂
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👏👏👏👏
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😊😊
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Yours?
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The NH birds are lucky in that even though they may have to pack up and relocate, there are plenty of white pine trees to winter in. 🙂
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Thanks for sharing your thoughts too, I really appreciate them. 🙂
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Time to make a new nest out of the fallen leaves.
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This was the best and most motivating thing I have read today. Time to make a new nest with new hopes and new reasons to Joy! Keep Well. 🙂
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beautifully crafted; short & powerful lines.. 🙂
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Thank You, Dilip! 🙂
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WoW!!! beautiful words………..loved it! 🙂 🙂
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Thank You. 😊
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my pleasure…….. 🙂 🙂
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